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#236422 - 07/16/12 08:45 PM FDK: Revealed
Zelnhelm Offline
Jimmy Olsen

Registered: 06/15/12
Posts: 16
Well, any feedback on my story would be appreciated.

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#236423 - 07/16/12 09:02 PM Re: FDK: Revealed [Re: Zelnhelm]
Lynn S M Offline
Lane and Kent

Registered: 05/06/12
Posts: 255
Loc: Delaware
Your first story is much better than mine was. Well done! And I am delighted that one of my stories was the inspiration.

I got a chuckle out of the idea of Lois lead-painting her clothes.

Joy,
Lynn

p.s., I do have a suggestion: You might want to consider asking someone to beta read your stories. BRs are fantastic for catching everything from punctuation errors to factual errors or out-of-character behaviors. Even the most polished authors benefit from having BRs.

I always have at least one BR for all of my works larger than extremely short vignettes, and every single BR-ed story I have written has benefited from having one.


Edited by Lynn S M (07/17/12 05:58 AM)
Edit Reason: Added p.s.

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