Your first story is much better than mine was. Well done! And I am delighted that one of my stories was the inspiration.
I got a chuckle out of the idea of Lois lead-painting her clothes.
p.s., I do have a suggestion: You might want to consider asking someone to beta read your stories. BRs are fantastic for catching everything from punctuation errors to factual errors or out-of-character behaviors. Even the most polished authors benefit from having BRs.
I always have at least one BR for all of my works larger than extremely short vignettes, and every single BR-ed story I have written has benefited from having one.
Edited by Lynn S M (07/17/12 05:58 AM)
Edit Reason: Added p.s.